Good song.
I don't get why people have had a problem with this. I sounds good to me, but then again, I'm probably more open to listening to different kinds of music. I'm also one to encourage people to keep trying. If you yourself aren't happy with it, that's one thing, but critics can only be just that, critics. They don't make or break you, but those who offer advice and enthusiasm will help you best along your way.
Now that I've said that, I do think this song however sounds like something you would hear on an old SNES or Genesis game. Maybe on a side scrolling beat 'em up type of game, like Final Fight, or Streets of Rage. Just keep working at it, and try to improve a little bit with each song. It'll show in your later songs. Keep it up.